>The animation itself was pretty good-- the timing of the movements felt natural and were not sluggish.
>The characters were nicely articulated .
>The textures were a nice touch and helped to establish a sort of gritty feeling, though they may have increased the file size of your movie.
> I can really tell that you put a lot of time and effort into making this-- it wasn't something that was churned out in about fifteen minutes.
> Quality is an obvious one. A lot of detail was lost in this version of your animation. The YouTube video is definitely better in terms of quality, but this version is definitely lacking.
> Maybe this is just personal taste, but I feel like you overused gradients a bit. The black+[insert color] gradients don't really do much to add form or interest to the areas you've applied them to, and they remind me of the Flash animations that were common in the late 90s.
> The music looped awkwardly in one spot. Try to keep your volumes consistent to make your loop point more subtle.
> The movie was somewhat repetitive in some areas. the scene where the clown was running around in his cell seemed especially overused.
Overall, you've got a pretty good first submission, though there are quite a few areas in which it could be improved. Keep working on adding some more variety and optimizing your animation to mazimize quality, and I think you've got a lot of potential.
PS. It would be best to avoid calling your reviewers "retarded," telling them to "suck a cock," or saying "fuck you" to people who point out flaws in your animation. It is somewhat juvenile and makes you look like you can't take a critique.
hey thanks, but i shant tone down my scornfull responses to haters, if you have a valid criticism, like you do , i appriciate it, and will work on it. keen eye by the way for catching that sound loop, the file wasnt long enough.
Great animation; lots of interesting use of camera angles and dynamic poses. It makes me really want to get off my lazy ass and start animating.
The context is pretty weak, though. I wish that you had included some sort of story behind how these two met and why they're fighting. While your animation skills are definitely strong enough to garner high scores on their own, some context and story would reinforce your skills, making this a great flash animation.
Great work; I'm looking forward to seeing more of your stuff in the future. (And aim for the front page!! Your skills are strong enough to make it there.)
Originally it had a little story, but doing fullbody animation that goes on for 4 minutes with full Bg's and effects... Isn't realistic to finish within time :(
Wow, you've stooped down to making hate-flashes? Honestly bud, Turd of the Week isn't something to be proud of... if anything, 3 turds of the week means your trophies are in the negative numbers, if that makes any sense.
Anyway, critique time.
At least now, you've got one character that doesn't look completely flat, meaning he has SOME 3D form going on. BUT. This was only achieved because you used photos from the web. This doesn't improve your character by much, though, because he(?) looks totally lifeless and doesn't move AT ALL. Try using some frame-by-frame animation to make your characters look more believable next time.
Your story writing is SERIOUSLY lacking. None of this really entertained me, aside from the "cool" aura that was kind of amusing. The way your characters interact with each other, however, really needs work. Text dialogue is almost always a no-no, so try voice acting instead.
Overall, though, I think the one thing that will help you THE MOST... the GUARANTEED TO HELP YOUR FLASH ANIMATIONS IMPROVE TENFOLD.... THE HOLY GRAIL OF MAKING FLASH ANIMATIONS is....
...take an animation class.
SERIOUSLY. If they offer that kind of class at your school, sign up for it right away! If not, find out if your local community college has something similar and sign up that way! you will never improve if you rely solely on making flash tweens and posting these slideshow-like flashes on Newgrounds. Get some assistance from someone who really knows what they're doing, and take some extra steps to learn how to improve! If you just do this, maybe you'll start losing haters and start getting some actual fans... or at least people who approve of your work.
It's pretty good compared to other drawing games, but like the others have said, it's nothing new or mind-blowing. Also, I'm not sure if this is something that's just happening on my end, but the drawing lags a little when I'm using my tablet which is annoying. I do like the option to save my drawings, though.
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