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[Clown Incarceration]

Pros:
>The animation itself was pretty good-- the timing of the movements felt natural and were not sluggish.
>The characters were nicely articulated .
>The textures were a nice touch and helped to establish a sort of gritty feeling, though they may have increased the file size of your movie.
> I can really tell that you put a lot of time and effort into making this-- it wasn't something that was churned out in about fifteen minutes.

Cons:
> Quality is an obvious one. A lot of detail was lost in this version of your animation. The YouTube video is definitely better in terms of quality, but this version is definitely lacking.
> Maybe this is just personal taste, but I feel like you overused gradients a bit. The black+[insert color] gradients don't really do much to add form or interest to the areas you've applied them to, and they remind me of the Flash animations that were common in the late 90s.
> The music looped awkwardly in one spot. Try to keep your volumes consistent to make your loop point more subtle.
> The movie was somewhat repetitive in some areas. the scene where the clown was running around in his cell seemed especially overused.

Overall, you've got a pretty good first submission, though there are quite a few areas in which it could be improved. Keep working on adding some more variety and optimizing your animation to mazimize quality, and I think you've got a lot of potential.

PS. It would be best to avoid calling your reviewers "retarded," telling them to "suck a cock," or saying "fuck you" to people who point out flaws in your animation. It is somewhat juvenile and makes you look like you can't take a critique.

FiveToes responds:

hey thanks, but i shant tone down my scornfull responses to haters, if you have a valid criticism, like you do , i appriciate it, and will work on it. keen eye by the way for catching that sound loop, the file wasnt long enough.

[Ninja versus demon]

Great animation

Great animation; lots of interesting use of camera angles and dynamic poses. It makes me really want to get off my lazy ass and start animating.

The context is pretty weak, though. I wish that you had included some sort of story behind how these two met and why they're fighting. While your animation skills are definitely strong enough to garner high scores on their own, some context and story would reinforce your skills, making this a great flash animation.

Great work; I'm looking forward to seeing more of your stuff in the future. (And aim for the front page!! Your skills are strong enough to make it there.)

SunnyGOES responds:

Originally it had a little story, but doing fullbody animation that goes on for 4 minutes with full Bg's and effects... Isn't realistic to finish within time :(

[Trampoline Dive]

Great work!

That was hilarious! One doesn't normally see very many good stick figure animations, but this was great. ;D The animation was unexpectedly smooth, the music fit perfectly, and the ending was surprising and made me laugh.

One thing bothers me, though... I'm concerned about what happened to the second stick guy after he was launched into the air. xD

Pinecones36 responds:

I assume he will impact the pavement!

[[Kimi ni todoke]]

Not bad.

Nice work; I really like your artistic vision and the way you laid things out on the screen. The way you drew the girl and the boy were really great, and the colors were bold and pleasing to look at.

However, there are a few things upon which you could improve. Namely, the choppiness of the animation. I'm not talking about the tweens; those were great. But the animation where you've got the boy and the girl moving were far too slow-- I felt like I was watching a slideshow instead of an animation. I would suggest that you add more in-between frames to make the transitions between your keyframes more smooth and animated.

Other than that, this was pretty chill. Great work! :)

Xandroid responds:

Thx men. Someone else has already told me about that too. I'll definitly keep that in mind next time.

[New! Super Tukari Bros.]

Not bad.

My first thought upon seeing this flash was "What? It's just a title screen? Talk about disappointing." But then I noticed the art and animation quality. It's very colorful and pleasing to look at, not to mention the run cycles are pretty good for the style this is in. I really like the way you delayed the run cycle on some of the characters, so they're not all running in sync. The way you bobbed the heads and tails as they run is also appealing.

Overall, while this lacks any kind of story whatsoever, it still entertained me. Nice work. :)

Ganton responds:

I might actually be making a game including this Title screen, keep your hopes up!
and hopefully the game itself will be fun!

[TNYG Anime Teaser]

Nice concept

I like the story concept; it's quite unlike any other stories I've heard of before. But, there are a few parts you could polish up on this.

-The art style is nice, but your anatomy could use some work-- namely hands, profile views, and proportions. I noticed the hands looked somewhat rushed. If this was because you didn't want to draw the same hands over and over, that's understandable, but it's advisable that you take some time drawing them anyway, because it will help make your flash look better. As far as profiles go, the jaw should be more defined and convex-- they tend to be blockier in males, and the way you drew the green haired boy's jaw makes it look like it's concave. The ear also looks kind of squished, and the neck also looks a little too skinny. The only big thing I think I should point out about proportions, though, is that the green haired boy's arm was far too short. His elbow should be approximately level with his navel, and his hands should come down to about the middle of his thighs. Of course, this is all sort of nit-picky, so if you didn't want to focus on these aspects, that's understandable. I just think you could improve the animation quality by focusing a little on some good solid drawing. :)

-Speaking of animation, the motion you have here is kind of limited. It's pretty choppy, and it seems like you relied quite a bit on pans of still images and stills with a little bit of movement (like the teardrop). I also thought the green haired boy's head turns a bit too quickly to match his mood. Try slowing it down a bit, and draw more in-between frames to make it run smoother. The part when the angel reaches her hand up could also use some work-- her body lost volume when she moved. This makes for some passable yet unconvincing artwork. If you pay close attention to how big something is when you're doing frame-by-frame animation, the overall quality will get better dramatically. :) In the part where the white-haired boy swung the sword, the hand placement on the sword looked kind of awkward, not to mention the swinging of the sword went by too quickly to properly register what happened. Also, when he gets those shocked-looking eyes, I think it would help a lot to put in some head movement to help communicate and exaggerate the state of shock he's in. It'll really help your audience connect with your characters, too. In the fire scene, I think it would have helped to put some movement in the fire to make it look more convincing. the static image made it look more like a painting than anything. I liked the motion tween, though.

I don't know what to think about the choice of music. On one hand, it fits the theme really well, but on the other hand, it's not the kind of music one would expect in an anime teaser. It's kind of like hearing Beethoven's "Moonlight Sonata" for a dramatic fight sequence. On one hand, it's really emotional, but on the other hand, well... you get the point.

-Finally, your Japanese is a little off. "Tenshi no you na gakuen" Literally translates to "An academy like an angel." A better English-to-Japanese translation could possibly be "Tenshi no danshi gakuen," but even that is a little iffy. My Japanese isn't the best. ^^;

Overall, it's a pretty neat anime teaser. It has a good premise and it's emotional, but the technicalities could use some work. Other than the things I pointed out, though, I like it. ;D

pancakery responds:

I'm not great at japanese, but I looked it up and 'tenshi no youna *something*" meant 'angelic smile", that is, tenshi = angel, youna = like, ic, therefore angelic, and gakuen I meant to take as boys academy, because in Hana kimi, it's Ohsaka Gakuen, which is ohsaka boys academy... I just put two and two together. Thanks for the rework though :D

In fact, thanks for the review! Taking the time to type it all up, I really appreciate that :)

For the song, I aws going for the emotional-type battle sequence. I guess I didn't really pull it off as well as I was hoping -_-;;

I will work on my anatomy! I think for my next video, I'll do part of it in one day, another part of it the next day touching up on what doesn't look right, and so on, until it's done. That way I shouldn't get bored doing the same thing over and over again but sliiightly different.

Yay technique!

Thankyou! Your review was super helpful :D

[Dino's Walk the Walk]

Great Animation

As an animation exercise, this is great. :) The movement of the hind legs is realistic and fun to watch, and the part at the end where the dinosaur charges at the camera was a little unexpected and made for a great twist.

I think you could make a few tweaks here or there. For starters, I think you should get rid of the horizontal line at the bottom. It doesn't really make a good ground plane, since the dinosaur's feet is above the line in most of the animation. Another thing you could do is move the dinosaur's chest area up and down as it's walking to provide for some good secondary action. It would also be great if we could see the dinosaur's head, but if you wanted to leave it out at the top of the screen to emphasize how big it is, I could see how that works, although it's not really necessary.

Overall, this is a good animation, even if it doesn't really have a story, color, or music, which is always a plus. You've got some really good raw animation skill, which I think speaks a lot for itself. :) Great work!

Evil-eS responds:

Fixed the line ^^
and the head out of the picture was intentional, since the focus overall was of the legs themselves not the whole dino
either way thank you for the insight, much appreciated